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Old January 15, 2011, 06:29:09 PM
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Did you read Flames of Darkness and have something you want to say about it?

Shade and I work together coming up with the plot of this story, but I do most of the writing. Did I do a good job? Did I use enough descriptive words? Was part of the chapter you read unclear? I'm eager to hear what you think, so leave all your feedback, critiques, or other comments here! Thanks!
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Old January 15, 2011, 09:00:26 PM
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I'm not sure whether or not this is Pokemon fan-fiction.
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Old January 15, 2011, 10:30:48 PM
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I'm not sure whether or not this is Pokemon fan-fiction.
It is a Pokémon fan-fiction just wait a bit.
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Old January 22, 2011, 03:32:24 PM
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This is a pretty cool story.
Also, you spelled scene wrong in the last chapter.
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Old January 23, 2011, 03:09:01 PM
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This is a pretty cool story.
Also, you spelled scene wrong in the last chapter.
Thank you very much! I can't seem to find the misspelling, though. What sentence was it in?
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Old January 23, 2011, 03:12:32 PM
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Shade ran off as fast as he could to Aquinira falls, but Espeon hadn’t  even noticed he’d left. Her attention was fixated on the charred,  ash-covered seen that stretched out in front of her. Shade dashed  through the shadows of the forest once more, sprinting toward the falls.  If there was any doubt in his mind that he was imagining this, it was  gone now. The closer he got to Aquinira falls, the stronger the feeling  got. Corona was in trouble…         

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